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The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992

The line graph illustrates the percentage of audiences in UK who listen to radio and watch TV during the day from October to December 1992
The line graph depicts the proportions of viewers in the UK between two groups
radio
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 and TV compared with time of day and night from October to December 1992.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the trend of TV was significantly increased
whereas
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radio
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 was steadily declining. From the TV information apparent proportions started at 7% at 1.00 A.
M
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. In the next few hours was moderately decreased to 3% at 7 A.
M
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. and went down again to 2 % at 11.00 A.
M
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.
Moreover
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, the percentage rose to the peak at approximately 45% at 21.00 P.
M
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.
Although
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 in the
last
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 hour of the day reduced to 15%. On the one hand,
Radio
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 illustrates started from 4% at 1.00 A.
M
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 and rose to peak at 25% at 9.00 A.
M
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. After that a fluctuated gradually dropped to 10 % at 15 P.
M
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.
However
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, in the final hour of the
radio
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 broadcast was approximately 3% of the UK population.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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