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As global trade increase, many goods including those we use in daily basis are produced in another country and have to be transport long distance. Do benefit of this trend outweigh disadvantages?

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Introduction
Development
transportation
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of transportation
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 system
give
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gives
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opportuinity
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opportunity
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international
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the international
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 market to
delivery
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 a
lot
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 of abroud
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producs
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products
product
. In
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this
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apply
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this
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benefits
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the benefits
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 long distance products
than
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over
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 local ones.
Body paragraph 1
We have full of
variotion
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variation
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producs
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products
product
 in
the
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our stores and a
lot
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 of people have a chance to be aware
how
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of how
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delitious
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delicious
migth
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might
 be
fruats
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fruits
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world
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the world
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.
Body paragraph 2
First of all
deffirent
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different
country
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countries
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 has different
climate
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climates
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 and
same
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some
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 of them
not
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are not
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 able to provide full of
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producs
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products
product
 for their citizens,
an
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in
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adition
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addition
 some
counrties
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countries
 are used to
import
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importing
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 from others food and
producs
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.
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Evropion
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Environmental
counrties
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countries
counties
has
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have
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tiny
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little
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 space for agreculture,
moreover
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not
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is not
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 relevant to
grow
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growing
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 some common foods for nowadays people.
Which
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This
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 is why one of the best
way
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ways
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 for
this
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 country to provide various
kinf
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kinds
kind
 of vegetables and crops,
fruts
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fruits
 to buy from countries who have more
convinient
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convenient
 condition
foe
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for
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 that.
Body paragraph 3
Second
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one
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apply
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of
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apply
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important
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the important
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 reason is people can try
fruts
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fruits
 and
vagatables
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vegetables
what
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that
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 were grown
in
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on
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other
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another
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 side of
world
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the world
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. Not everyone can
affort
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afford
effort
 to
trevel
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travel
 and try varios of fruit in
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the counrty
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counrty
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country
county
 where was grown, thank
for
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to
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the
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devolopment
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development
 of
logistic
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logistics
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 everyone can buy and use some of
common
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the common
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 fruits and vagatables in daily life.
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 a
lot
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 of children like
banan
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banana
,
becouse
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because
 it is very
yammy
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yummy
.
Conclusion
In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 long distance
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producs
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products
product
 has a
lot
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 of benefits and
outwight
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outright
outwit
 all
drowbacs
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drawbacks
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coherence cohesion
You should focus on organizing your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the supporting sentences are relevant to the main idea.
coherence cohesion
Work on crafting a more coherent essay by linking ideas with appropriate linking words, such as 'furthermore,' 'however,' 'for example,' and 'therefore.' This will help to improve the flow between sentences and ideas.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address the topic question in both the introduction and the conclusion. Clearly state your opinion on whether the benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and summarise your main points in the conclusion.
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Illustrate your points with relevant examples. Make sure that the examples provided clearly support the argument that you are making and that they are fully developed.
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Pay attention to spelling, grammar, and punctuation. Errors can detract significantly from the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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