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People today don't make good use of their time and spend too much time watching TV and playing video games instead of participating in more productive activities. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Modern individuals tend to
spent
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spend
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 time
whatching
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watching
 TV and
scrooling
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scrolling
 social
media
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, rather
to be
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than being
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 active person. I
am totally agree
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totally agree
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 with
this
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 statement,
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the improvment
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improvment
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improvement
of
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in
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 social
media
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 and full of computer
gimes
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games
 on the internet
attract
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attracts
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people
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be
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to be
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 active and take
a
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apply
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part
some
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in some
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 sports
club
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clubs
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.
Body · 1
Firstly
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,
socail
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social
media
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 have
crucial
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a crucial
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 influence
to
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on
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people
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in
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apply
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partucular
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particularly
for
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apply
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young
people
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.
Defenitely
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Definitely
 short
vidios
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videos
 and funny content make to be addictive person.
Consiquiently
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Consequently
people
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 forget about time management and can
spent
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spend
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 a lot of time
for
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on
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this
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.
In
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addition
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addition,
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filmakers
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filmmakers
 and
creaters
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creators
 make money selling
this
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 content for us,
this
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why
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is why
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 they will do
all
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apply
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their best to attract us from
another task
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other tasks
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 like
sport
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sports
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.
Body · 2
Secondly
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, I strongly believe that modern children even
adult
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adults
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people
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prefer
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prefer to
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 play a
gime
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game
 on
computer
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a computer
the computer
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 rather
in
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than in
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live
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life
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. Because it
is
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does
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 not
required
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require
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 a lot of energy and
it
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apply
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games
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 can give true emotion.
In addition
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Body · 3
nowadays
games
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is
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are
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 very interesting and
list
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the list
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 of
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this
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these
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games
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various
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varies
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. Everyone can find
own
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their own
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fevourite
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favourite
 game and play
none stop
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nonstop
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.
Conclusion
In
conclucion
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conclusion
, in the
fulled
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full
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 world with social
media
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 and computer
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games
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games,
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people
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 can easily forget about really
nececcery
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necessary
activity
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activities
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 and
other king
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another king
other kings
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 of
activation
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activities
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.

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introduction
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logical structure
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lexical resource
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supported main points
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grammatical range and accuracy
Mind your spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Always proofread your essay to correct any mistakes that can hinder the clarity of your message.
conclusion
Create a conclusion that summarizes your main points and restates your initial position clearly. The conclusion should feel like a closure to the entire argument presented in the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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