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The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of the world's oil resources held in different areas, together with the proportions consumed annually in the same areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs show the percentage of
oil
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 resources in the globe and the
perecntage
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percentage
 of
oil
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 consumption per year in the
world
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.
Overall
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, the
middle east
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Middle East
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 has the highest proportion of total
world
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oil
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ressources
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resources
 and Asia the highest proportion of total
world
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anual
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annual
oil
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 consumption,
although
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 Australia and New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 have the lowest in both categories. On the one hand,
while
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the middle
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middle east
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Middle East
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 has more
tan
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than
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a
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apply
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half of
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oil
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the oil
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 resources on its own, followed by Canada with 14.84%, Australia and New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 have only a 0.30% of it followed by Western Europe,
that
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which
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 has 1.17% more
tan
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than
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 the latter.
On the other hand
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, Asia and the United States together consume half of the total
world
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oil
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 each year with 26.21 and 25.48 percent in that same order.
However
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, Australia and New
Zeland
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Zealand
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 are again the
one
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ones
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consumming
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consuming
 the
less
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least
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 with
a
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apply
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1.31% followed by Canada
that
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which
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 consumes only 2.48 percent of
oil
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annualy
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annually
.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, world with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • resources
  • consumption
  • annually
  • regions
  • disparity
  • consumption rates
  • high/low resources
  • global market dynamics
  • geopolitical relations
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