The chart belows shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years

The chart belows shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years
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The pie chart and table illustrate Anthropology
students
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outcome
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after graduating from a university and their income after five years on
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,
majority
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of graduates have
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jobs .
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data displays making more money over five years and employers of private companies made the lowest income. As can be observed, The chart indicates that 52% of their destination ended up at full-time
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continiued
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continued
by 15 and 12 per cent for part-time
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and unemployed
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.
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, 8% of students tend to have full-time
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postgraduate
courses and
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numbers for those with no info.
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of the graduates have chosen to work part-time jobs
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studies. As for the table, 50 and 40 percent of Government sectors and Freelance consultants have made more than 100,000$
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private
companies workers made the 30% of the makers. 40,30 and 25% of each made 75,000-90,000$ per year .
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whilst both consultants and state sectores have 15 and 5 per cent for the 50-74,999$ and 25-49,999$ , the private workers had the
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highest
rank for both with 35 and
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10 per
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