The chart belows shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree courses. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years
The pie chart and table illustrate Anthropology
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student's
students'
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outcomes
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the majority
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full-time
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sectors
data displays making more money over five years and employers of private companies made the lowest income.
As can be observed, The chart indicates that 52% of their destination ended up at full-time Change the noun form
sector
works
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work
continiued
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continued
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work
ones
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apply
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postgraduate
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the same
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further
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in
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prive
companies workers made the 30% of the makers.
40,30 and 25% of each made 75,000-90,000$ per year . Correct your spelling
private
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whilst both consultants and state sectores have 15 and 5 per cent for the 50-74,999$ and 25-49,999$ , the private workers had the Linking Words
highst
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