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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the pie charts indicate the percentages of British
students
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 at one particular university in England who could speak a foreign language
in addition
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 to English, in 2000 and 2010.
overall
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, bilingualism and multilingualism increased in 2010. moving onto detail, the number of
students
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 who could speak Spanish only constituted the vast majority in both years.
on the other hand
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,
students
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 who weren't able to speak other languages halved in 2010.
in addition
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,
students
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 who speak another language increased and reached 20.
on the other hand
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, the number of
students
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 speaking two other languages and German only stood stable.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • multilingual
  • linguistic competence
  • significant
  • trend
  • increase/decrease
  • stable
  • popularity
  • relatively
  • decade
  • compare/contrast
  • survey
  • data
  • fluent
  • proficient
  • bilingual
  • predominant
  • minority
  • emerge
  • dwindle
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