You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter of the manager of the nearest private sports club •introduce yourself •say why you are interested in this sports club •ask some questions about the club e.g. facilities, members, costs
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Dead Sir or Madam
I am writing regarding
to
your private sports Remove the preposition
apply
club
.
I am a student in a college. I had
been living in a big city which Wrong verb form
have
have
several Change the verb form
has
sport
clubs. Change the noun form
sports
In the
college where I am Change preposition
The
a
currently studying has no sports facilities. That's why, I am writing to you. I am really in your fitness centre which has a great member of gym equipment. Your Correct article usage
apply
sport
centre is the closest Change the noun form
sports
club
to my college. I hear some news from my friends that, they also
regulary
go to your fitness Correct your spelling
regularly
club
. Whenever I do exercise with my friends, I feel sense
of enjoyment Add an article
a sense
although
I sweat a lot.
First of all, I am a very shy person. In my opinionparticipating
in Correct your spelling
opinion participating
fitness
centre allows you to socialize which means you can make friends.
Correct article usage
a fitness
Secondly
, not only shy
person, but Correct article usage
a shy
also
heavy
weight. I honestly believe thatCorrect article usage
a heavy
,
many people keep fit with your help. As I understand it, Remove the comma
apply
me
Correct pronoun usage
I
also
to get into shape with your support.
Finally
, I want to know some information. How many facilities have?.
Does your Change the punctuation
?
sport
Change the noun form
sports
club
have a student discount?.
The Change the punctuation
?
last
question that, I really want to know. Who is trainer
for people like meAdd an article
a trainer
the trainer
?.
Female or maleChange the punctuation
?
?.
I would appreciate it if you would look into Change the punctuation
?
this
matter as soon as possible. Because soon my wedding I need to lose weight immediately.
Yours faithfully,
ShaxrizodaSubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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coherence cohesion
Make sure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should contain a central idea that is developed through specific details or questions.
task achievement
Use a polite and formal tone throughout your letter as it is addressed to the manager of a sports club. Consider using more formal language and avoid informal expressions.
task achievement
Clarify your questions to the sports club manager by making them more specific and focused on their services. Ensure that each question is relevant to your need as a student looking for sports facilities.
coherence cohesion
The greeting should begin with 'Dear' rather than 'Dead', and the signing off phrase should match the formality of the letter. Use 'Yours sincerely' if using the name, and 'Yours faithfully' if you began with 'Sir or Madam'.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, ensure that paragraphs are logically connected, and transitions between paragraphs are smooth. Use linking words and phrases to maintain a clear flow of ideas.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.