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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, -explain your situation -describe your problems -tell him/her when you think you can move in

#move #apartment #month #course #provider #-explain #situation #-describe #-tell
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why, I am writing
this
 letter is I am going to
move
 into a rented
apartment
 next
month
, but there are some problems with me. I am
due to
move
 into
a
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an
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apartment
 next
month
 but I can not it I am working
in
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for
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the
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a
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 big company.
That is
, I am going to
move
 into
a
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an
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apartment
, for I could not live the previous from
this
 place. There are some problems with me.
For example
, I need money because my work will not give
the
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me the
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 money the soon
month
. Which is why, I live with my friend. I strongly believe that I can
move
 in two
month
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months
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next,
for
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because
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 my company is giving
money
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me money
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two
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for two
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month
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months
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 next. It is very unpleasant for me. My friend is very kind
for
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to
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 me.
That is
, I live with my friend. In a nutshell,
apartment
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an apartment
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 is necessary
two
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for two
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month
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months
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 next. I hope you are accepting my letter. Yours faithfully, Abrayev Bekhruzbek.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to clearly structure the letter into paragraphs with each paragraph discussing a separate point.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on developing each point more fully with explanations or examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and signing-off expressions for formal letters.
Task Achievement
Respond to all bullet points in the task adequately and expand upon them to fully answer the prompt.
Task Achievement
Use formal language consistently throughout the letter to maintain a suitable tone for the situation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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