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You have just finished your master’s degree and need to leave your current part-time job to search for full-time employment. Write a letter to your current employer. In your letter o● explain why you will not pursue a full-time job in his/her company o● say why you’ve enjoyed working for him/her o● tell him/her how much longer you will continue to work for him/her.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to let you know that I recently finished my master's degree and unfortunately, I need to leave
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 part-time job to search for full-time employment. Recently, I completed my master's in Computer Science and to get my degree, I need to
work
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 as a full-time employee in an
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company
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. I have been working with TJX Canada as a part-time associate for more than 3 years .
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 job is a good fit for
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 or for the one's who want to pursue
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 career in
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Business Management.
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 my study, I need to
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 in an
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company
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 to require
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 experience with machines and technical terms.
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 part-time job not only helped me financially
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 but
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 enhanced my English speaking skills.
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, TJX taught me many advanced skills that are required in any business like
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 player, customer service,
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, and many more.
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company
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 working environment and co-workers that made my whole working journey enjoyable. As I have been searching and giving interviews for full-time jobs so, I will not be able to
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 much longer with
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company
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. My
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 day at
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 will be 1st March 2024. I hope you will address
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 concern as soon as possible and please let me know if you require any
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 information. Yours faithfully, Tom

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Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make sure to organize your writing clearly. Each paragraph should have a clear central topic. Transitions like 'Furthermore,' 'Additionally,' or 'However,' can improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs. Aim for a strong opening and closing statement that clearly addresses the letter's purpose and finalizes the discussion.
Task Achievement
In terms of task achievement, you've done well in explaining the reasons for leaving and your experience at the job. However, providing more specific examples or elaborating on your future career goals and how they align with your education could strengthen your response. Be sure to maintain a polite and professional tone throughout the letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time employment
  • full-time employment
  • qualifications
  • master's degree
  • gratitude
  • valuable experience
  • professional courtesy
  • adequate notice
  • transition period
  • mentorship
  • company culture
  • teamwork
  • professional relationship
  • commitment
  • dedication
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