Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of good s. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, people like
when
their life is Correct pronoun usage
it when
eazy
, Correct your spelling
easy
that is
why companies are using not eco-friendly packaging of goods, for
example
Add the comma(s)
example,
cutted
fruits or vegetables. Unfortunately, the population is buying Correct your spelling
cut
this
, which leads to continuing this
form of use of plastic waste
. In my opinion, we should limited
as much as we can Change the verb form
be limited
limit
this
procedure and help our planet with
not producing so much trash.
Change preposition
by
Firstly
, as supermarkets
, their advantage is freshnes
, by that I mean Correct your spelling
fresh
produckts
, when they are packed into a Correct your spelling
products
conteiner
or foil, can Correct your spelling
container
last
longer, which reasults
Correct your spelling
results
with
less Change preposition
in
waste
of food. Secendly
, Correct your spelling
Secondly
maufactures
are earning more money from the buyers Correct your spelling
manufactures
manufacturers
becuase
of the used materials. Correct your spelling
because
Furthermore
, they are only interested into
profits, Change preposition
in
that is
why the Earth do not matter. Next,
the customers, for them it is easier to buy staff that is
already cutted
or packed nicely into plastic, and we all get that. Correct your spelling
cut
This
help from Change preposition
With this
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the companic
companic
we can save time or it is more Correct your spelling
companies
company
accesible
for Correct your spelling
accessible
disable
people, that have problems with that.
Change the form of the verb
disabled
On the other hand
, as supermarkets
and manufacture
, I would recommend Replace the word
manufacturers
to reduce
Change the verb form
reducing
usage
of products that are unnecessary, with that the cost of Add an article
the usage
producture
will Correct your spelling
products
decruse
. Correct your spelling
decrease
Furthermore
, our planet would get a lot of benefits with
that. Change preposition
from
Therefore
, supermarkets
should put out the statement to not accept that form of waste
of plastic. The disadvantage for customers is Correct article usage
the visial
visial
aspect of the product. In our times, we buy with our eyes. To Correct your spelling
visual
vital
ilustrate
that, when we go shopping and see perfect, yellow, Correct your spelling
illustrate
banans
and next to them Correct your spelling
bananas
banans
that have already brown spots, of Correct your spelling
bananas
course
we will take the perfect one. Add the comma(s)
course,
Therefore
, people could change supermarkets
for
local farm shops, which support Change preposition
to
planet
and have new products daily.
In conclusion, I think that we should reduce Add an article
the planet
waste
to its minimum, so that we would not have consisuances
Correct your spelling
consequences
of
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for
this
actions in the future. We can Correct determiner usage
these
also
see that the
both points of view are Remove the article
apply
diffrent
, for me, the Correct your spelling
different
disadavtages
are stronger.Correct your spelling
disadvantages
disadvantage
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