Some university students wan to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification.

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Nowadays, some
people
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who study in some universities learn some
subjects
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in addition
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to
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main
subjects
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in their free
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.
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, others believe that both spending
time
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and giving attention to studying for a
qualification
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. On the one hand, some
people
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think that learning some different
subjects
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in addition
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to their main
subjects
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is not only
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easier but
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interesting because they are in
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full-
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learning all day
who
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have no
time
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to be bored.
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, they always find
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idea is very useful because
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they can know more information in their
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which are addition
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as they can learn some new languages
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these knowledges
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can open new doors for their future life.
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, others prefer to give their full
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to learn for
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qualification
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because they think that we may forget all things or previous themes we studied in our main subject, if we study a lot of
subjects
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at the same
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but in
leaning
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learning
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for
qualification
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, we cannot forget them because
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people
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can forget nothing if they do
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again and again rather than repeat a lot of
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, in my opinion, they can do their all work with
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because, all of their work
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got
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a schedule
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, and they may have some
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to do something because
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their subject has not
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requirements to repeat their work. In conclusion,
although
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there are a lot of
people
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who accept
this
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idea, in my opinion, we should pay our full attention to studying for
qualification
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because we may forget all
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the things
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which we have learnt but we can maintain our
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qualification
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qualifications
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.
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coherence cohesion
Introduce clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader and improve coherence.
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Work on logical transitions between paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve cohesion and coherence between sentences and ideas.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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