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Writing Samples
Band 4

In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move out of large cities and into regional areas. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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urbanitation
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urbanisation
urbanization
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industries
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an
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and
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businesses
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in
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on
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the lagre
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lagre
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large
city
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the
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urbanitation
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Urbanization
make
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makes
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city
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over populated
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overpopulated
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 and the other in side regional
areas
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is
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 under populaded. to make it
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goverment
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government
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encouraging
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encourage
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industries
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an
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and
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businesses
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 to move out to the regional
areas
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. the encouragement from the
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goverment
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government
 can have more advantages rather than
disadventages
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disadvantages
.
firsly
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Firstly
, the advantages
for
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 that encouragement
is
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are
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 to
decrise
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decrease
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city
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population
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 and
increse
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increase
increased
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population
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the population
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 in the regional
areas
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. with the
decrising
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decreasing
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city
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city,
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population
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 can make that
city
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 don't have a
trafficjam
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traffic jam
 couse. and for the regional
areas
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 can
be develop
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be developed
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incresing
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increasing
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population
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.
secondly
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, the movement of
industries
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 and
bussinesses
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businesses
 to regional
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area
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areas
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 can develop the
ecomonic
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economy
 in that
area
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. many people from the regional
area
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 can easily get a job because in their
area
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 have
a
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apply
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industries
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 and
businesses
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 which offer many new
job
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jobs
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.
in addition
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, if
regional
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a regional
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area
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have
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has
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 many
industries
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 and
businesses
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 that
area
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 can have more revenue from the tax. money from the tax can
use
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be used
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 to develop that regional
area
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such
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make
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making
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a
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apply
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good public
tranportation
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transportation
,
school
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schools
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,
comunal
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communal
areas
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 etc.
furthermore
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, the disadvantage to encouraging
industries
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 and
businesses
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 to move out of large cities and into regional
areas
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 is the
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goverment
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government
 must
ansure
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ensure
 that regional
areas
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 ready to get more
citizen
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citizens
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. the
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goverment
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government
 must
prepere
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prepare
about
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for
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 infrastructure to
suport
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support
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runing
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running
 of
industries
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 and
businesses
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.
to
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 make good infrastructure
need
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needs
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 time and a lot of money.
finally
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, that encouragement has more
adventeges
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advantages
 rather than
disadventages
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disadvantages
. and that
movement
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the movement
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industries
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of industries
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 and
businesses
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 to the regional
areas
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 can make
balace
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balance
 development between large cities and regional
areas
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic diversification
  • urban congestion
  • regional development
  • infrastructure
  • healthcare
  • environmental impact
  • air quality
  • over-reliance
  • cultural disruption
  • industrial activity
  • ecosystems
  • sustainable
  • urban-rural migration
  • economic incentives
  • workforce
  • relocation costs
  • zoning regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • public-private partnerships
  • livability
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