The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Cement
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Making
Process
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and Concrete
Production
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for Building Purposes There are two steps in the
process
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. One is
cement
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making processes and two is concrete
production
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. There are several steps for each processes.
First,
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to make
cement
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, limestone, clay and several equipment are needed. In the first step of the
process
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, limestone and clay were crushed and turned into powder. The powder
then
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was mixed in a mixing barrel and
then
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will go through a rotating heater the next. After it was crushed and heated, the heated and crushed limestone and clay will go through a grinder to make them even more fine. The result is what we know as
cement
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. The
cement
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then
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was put into bags to be transported into the building site to be use for concrete
production
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. The next
process
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is concrete
production
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. There are
also
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several steps in the concrete
production
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.
First,
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15 percent of concrete and 25% of sand was added into the concrete machine. Ten percent of water
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added into the
mix
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. The
mix
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then
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was rotated in the mixer.
While
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the mixture of
cement
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, sand and water was mixed in the mixer, 50 percent of gravel was added
last
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in the mixture. The
last
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step is to let the mixer
mix
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the mixture together until it formed a fine concrete
mix
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, which
then
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will be used for building purposes.
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