Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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have different views about which
school
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subjects are most important:
history
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or
science
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and
technology
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.
While
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knowing
history
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is necessary for everyone, I believe
science
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and
technology
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are more important. On the one hand,
people
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need to know their
history
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. There were a lot of individual in the past who had great impact on society.
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lots of events and celebrations held in past which still
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do like ancient
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. All these events and famous
people
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can be teach in
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classes in
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to
children
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.
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with teaching
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,
children
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learn about all mistakes that
people
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did in the past and they have chance not repeat that mistakes again.
On the other hand
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,
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and
technology
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subjects are trends in all the world. Teaching these subjects in
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can lead
children
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to be a scientist and create some innovation which help all
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in the world to have better life.
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these topics are tough to learn, but they are essential for any society to improve. In fact any
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are interest to do scientific experiences in lab and it is very important that
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provide
such
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places where pupils can do anythings.
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, every invention which help to have better life, connect to
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, but sometimes human may use
technology
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for bad reason
for example
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: invention atom bomb which kill thousand Japanese and it is up to teachers learn
children
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that they don’t use
technology
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for bad things. In conclusion, I can understand why some
people
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like
history
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and want their
children
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learn it, but it seems to me that nowadays
science
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and
technology
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are more desirable.
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task achievement
Expand your coverage of both views before presenting your own opinion to provide a more balanced discussion.
coherence & cohesion
Introduce your essay with a stronger thesis statement that clearly outlines the topics you will discuss. This helps provide a roadmap for your essay.
coherence & cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words to connect ideas more smoothly and enhance the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Incorporate more specific examples to substantiate your arguments. This adds depth and persuasiveness to your essay.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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