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Average percentage of sodium, saturated fats and added sugar in typical meals consumed in the USA.

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The
given
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pie diagrams illustrate three kinds of unhealthy substances in food, which may be harmful
for
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to
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 wellness.
Overall
, the highest percentage of nutrients
of
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in
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 dinner
about
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 forty per
cent
 of sodium and saturated fat.
Furthermore
, added
sugar
 is one of the junk components of breakfast amount forty-two per
cent
 of the total. The first two charts demonstrate
us
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to us
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 the quantity of sodium and saturated fat in different types of meals. One can
be observed
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 that the number of each
nutrients
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 are similar.
Furthermore
, the highest percentage of the nutrients is in breakfast almost forty per
cent
 of all.
Then
, other dishes constitute more than
a
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half of the total. The
last
 diagram illustrates the addition of
sugar
 to food. The biggest
sugar adding
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 is in snacks, a little less than
a
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forty-fifths. Following that,
sugar
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the sugar
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 appending percentage in dinner, breakfast and lunch approximately twenty per
cent
. In fact,
the
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 great deal of supplements are contained in the morning meals.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure your introduction provides a clear overview of the topic and include a conclusion to summarize your main points. This will help achieve a more effective structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
When presenting data, make sure to maintain a logical flow between paragraphs and use cohesive devices effectively to link ideas and paragraphs together.
Task Achievement
Aim to fully address the task by ensuring all parts of the prompt are answered thoroughly. Provide a balanced comparison of the data provided.
Task Achievement
Clarify and elaborate on your main ideas by providing specific examples and data from the graphs wherever possible. This will enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your response.

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