The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
The bar chart illustrates the
households
owning and renting accommodation in England and Wale
from 1918 to 2011 with instruments in percentages.
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Wales
To begin
with, in 1918, households
in rented accommodation was
started at 78 % but slowly decreased to 68 % in 1939 but a small rise Unnecessary verb
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on
the next 14 years with 69% before Change preposition
in
dropped
to 59% in 1961.In Change the form of the verb
dropping
contast
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contrast
households
in owned accommodation started at only 22% and has
increased steadily to 32% before Unnecessary verb
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hit
40% in 1961.As seen from the chart,both accommodations have the same figures at 50 % in 1971.Next,Wrong verb form
hitting
households
in owned gradually to rise until reach
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reached
to
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the
peak point in 2011 with 64% but it appears that Correct article usage
a
households
in rented were
continued to drop and Unnecessary verb
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finally
ended at 35% .
Overall
,it is clear that
people in England and Wale
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Wales
are
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preferd
to own a house rather than rent.Correct your spelling
prefer
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