The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.
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The bar chart illustrates the
households
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owning and renting accommodation in England and
Wale
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Wales
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from 1918 to 2011 with instruments in percentages.
To begin
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with, in 1918,
households
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in rented accommodation
was
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started at 78 % but slowly decreased to 68 % in 1939 but a small rise
on
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in
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the next 14 years with 69% before
dropped
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to 59% in 1961.In
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contrast
,
households
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in owned accommodation started at only 22% and
has
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increased steadily to 32% before
hit
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40% in 1961.As seen from the chart,both accommodations have the same figures at 50 % in 1971.Next,
households
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in owned gradually to rise until
reach
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reached
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to
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the
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peak point in 2011 with 64% but it appears that
households
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in rented
were
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continued to drop and
finally
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ended at 35% .
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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people in England and
Wale
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Wales
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are
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preferd
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prefer
to own a house rather than rent.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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