The Chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed men and women of different employment status. Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart depicts the amount of
hours
men and women
who enjoyed leisure time
in different type
of employment status from 1998 to 1999. Fix the agreement mistake
types
Overall
, the number of hours
of free time
was dominated by people who was
unemployed and retired either they were males or females, Change the verb form
were
while
employed
full Correct pronoun usage
those employed
time
got the opposite.
Looking in more detail, there were men and women
who were unemployed and retired respectively have the same amount of free time
around 70 hours
and 80 hours
. On the contrary
, people who has
Change the verb form
have
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
were
the busiest people in the world. Wrong verb form
are
For instance
, men who worked
full Wrong verb form
work
time
only have just under 50 hours
a year of leisure time
, however
Add a comma
however,
women
only have well under 40 hours
of free time
. Hence
, women
is
the least of all Change the verb form
are
due to
their job and manage
Wrong verb form
managing
house
.
Meanwhile, there were only females who worked as a Add an article
the house
part timer
and as Add a hyphen
part-timer
a housewives
. Part Correct the article-noun agreement
a housewife
housewives
timer
was a person who worked less Correct your spelling
part-timer
then
full Replace the word
than
timer
has about 40 Correct your spelling
full-timer
hours
of leisure time
. Next,
housewives was a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
women
who manage
Wrong verb form
managed
house
Fix the agreement mistake
houses
such
as cooking, cleaning and taking care of children has approximately 50 hours
of free time
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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