The Chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed men and women of different employment status. Write at least 150 words.

The Chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed men and women of different employment status. Write at least 150 words.
The bar chart depicts the amount of
hours
men and
women
who enjoyed leisure
time
in different
type
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types
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of employment status from 1998 to 1999.
Overall
, the number of
hours
of free
time
was dominated by people who
was
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were
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unemployed and retired either they were males or females,
while
employed
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those employed
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full
time
got the opposite. Looking in more detail, there were men and
women
who were unemployed and retired respectively have the same amount of free
time
around 70
hours
and 80
hours
.
On the contrary
, people who
has
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have
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full
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full-time
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time
job
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jobs
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were
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are
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the busiest people in the world.
For instance
, men who
worked
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work
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full
time
only have just under 50
hours
a year of leisure
time
,
however
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however,
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women
only have well under 40
hours
of free
time
.
Hence
,
women
is
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are
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the least of all
due to
their job and
manage
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managing
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house
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the house
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. Meanwhile, there were only females who worked as a
part timer
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part-timer
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and as
a housewives
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a housewife
housewives
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. Part
timer
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part-timer
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was a person who worked less
then
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than
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full
timer
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full-timer
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has about 40
hours
of leisure
time
.
Next,
housewives was
a
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apply
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women
who
manage
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managed
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house
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houses
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such
as cooking, cleaning and taking care of children has approximately 50
hours
of free
time
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, women, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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