The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004.
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THE BAR GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE TOTAL SPENDING ON THREE CATEGORIES BY BRITISH PEOPLE OF VARIOUS
AGE
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GROUPS IN 2004.
OVERALL
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, THE TOPMOST EXPENDITURE WAS OCCUPIED BY
FOOD
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AND
DRINK
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WHICH ACCOUNTED FOR HIGHER PERCENTAGES COMPARED WITH OTHER SECTIONS.
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ENTERTAINMENT WAS POPULAR AMONG THE 61-75
AGE
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GROUP, INDIVIDUALS WHO WERE MORE THAN 76 TENDED TO SPEND THEIR MONEY ON
FOOD
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AND
DRINK
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.
FOOD
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AND
DRINK
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OCCUPIED THE SIGNIFICANT PARTS WHICH WERE TOPMOST IN THE 31-45, 46-60, AND 76+ AGES GROUP WITH AROUND 13%, 17%, AND 23% IN THE UK IN 2004.
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, WITH THE INCREASES IN THE AGES,
FOOD
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AND
DRINK
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SURGED FROM ABOUT 6% TO 23% AMONG PEOPLE WHO WERE UNDER 30 AND MORE THAN 76. REGARDING THE OTHER CLASSIFICATIONS, ENTERTAINMENT SKYROCKETED FROM 6% TO 23% BETWEEN UNDER 30 AND 61-75
AGE
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CLASSES;
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, IT DROPPED DRAMATICALLY BY 10% DURING THE
AGE
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BETWEEN 61-75 AND 76.
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, RESTAURANTS AND HOTELS WERE PREFERRED BY YOUNGER CITIZENS WHO
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UNDER 60. BY THE LIFETIME, THE DEMAND FOR RESTAURANTS AND HOTELS DECREASED AND HIT THE LOWEST POINT IN THE 61-75
AGE
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GROUP.
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