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The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the percentage of British
students
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 in a particular UK University who mastered a second
language
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 other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, it is apparent from the pictures that the
students
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 who only use English as their
language
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 were only a minority among the others and had decreased over the ten-year period.
However
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, the
students
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 who were able to speak Spanish were the dominant group in both years.
To begin
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 with, Spanish was the
language
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 that the majority of learners used
besides
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 English for about 30% in 2000, and had increased to 35% in the next decade.
In addition
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, another
language
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 category had
also
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 risen by 5% from 15% and ranked second in 2010. Meanwhile, the monolingual
students
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 had halved to 10% in ten years time.
Moreover
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, these
students
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 had the same proportions as those who could speak French, which had fallen too.
Lastly
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, learners who used German and those who could speak more than two languages remained the same for both years with only one-tenth.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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