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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar chart illustrates information regarding the export earnings coming from several sectors in 2015 and 2016. The second features, which is a table, depict how those categories change in percentage from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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, almost all sectors experienced an increase in value
while
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 gems and jewellery showed a downward trajectory. Notably, textiles demonstrated a significant increase compared to other sectors.
To begin
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 with, petroleum products were the highest contributors in exports, earning approximately $60
billion
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 in 2015 and $62
billion
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 in 2016, meaning a mere 3% rise in its value.
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, agriculture products, engineered goods and textiles rose steadily throughout both years, with their respective percentages change were 0.81%, 8.5%, and 15,24%.
Therefore
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, textiles was a remarkable sector among others.
However
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, the export earnings of Gems and Jewelry dropped from $42
billion
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 to $40
billion
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 during both years, convincing that
this
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 sector is the only one that had a downtrend with a 5.18% decline.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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