The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given data illustrate the
contribution
of sectors to
thr
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the
economy of the UK in the twentieth
centry
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century
, ranging from
agriculture
,
manufacturing
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and manufacturing
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, to
business
and financial services, from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
we can see that the trend of
sector
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the sector
a sector
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of
business
and financial services
increase
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increases
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while
argriculture
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agriculture
and manufacturing decrease obviously.
To begin
with, from 1990 to 2000, the
contribution
of manufacturing and
agriculture
drop
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dropped
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. The percentage of manufacturing
reduce
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reduced
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slightly
that
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apply
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lose
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loss
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from around 40% to 20%.
In contrast
, the percentage of
agriculture
go
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went
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down significantly
which
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apply
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drop
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dropping
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from 50% in 1900 to almost 1% in 2000. Apart from that, the trend of
contribution
of
business
and financial
business
rise vitally from 1900 to 2000. It
increase
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increases
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from 2% to 40%. In 1900 and 1950, the
contribution
of
agriculture
is
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was
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highest
while
the
contribution
of
business
and financial is the lowest.
However
, in 2000, the proportion of
contribution
of
business
and financial in the largest one
while
agriculture
in the lowest.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words contribution, agriculture, business with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Declining trend
  • Agrarian economy
  • Fluctuations
  • Industrial advancements
  • Recessions
  • Significant growth
  • Service-oriented industries
  • Dynamic economic structure
  • Traditional sectors
  • Modern service-based sectors
  • Urbanization
  • Technological advancements
  • Global market integrations
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