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Band 3

You should spend about 20 minutes to write this task. The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

#minutes #picture #process #glass #bottles #summarise #information #features #comparison
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The diagrams illustrate
glass
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bottles
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 eliminated and reprocessed session. There are three main stages which divide into collecting, recycling, and selling process.
The
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firstly
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 stage, the
abandon
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abandoned
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glass
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bottles
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 should be collected and stored
in
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at
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collection
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the collection
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 point
then
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 the
bottles
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 should be transported to
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glass
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the glass
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 factory.
The
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secondly
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second
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 stage,
it
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the
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 should be pressed
by
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with
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the
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apply
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high-pressure water to separate the
bottles
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 for transparent, green
color
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colour
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, or brown
color
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. After that, it should be maintained in
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glass
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a glass
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 factory
then
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 it was made to become small parts of
glass
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.
Then
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, it should be burnt in
furnace
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a furnace
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 with
the
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a
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 high temperature
around
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of around
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 600
degree
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degrees
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 Celsius to 800
degree
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degrees
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 Celsius and in the process, it should be occurred two kinds of
glass
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that
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apply
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can be divided
for
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into
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 recycled liquid
glass
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 and new liquid
glass
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.
The
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next,
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these
glass
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 should be stored for a
shaped
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 in
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glass
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a glass
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 mould.
The
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finally
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 stage, all recycling
bottles
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 have become the new model that
prompt
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 to sell on the shelves of
supermarket
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the supermarket
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grammar and accuracy
There are several grammar and usage issues that need to be corrected. For instance, 'The firstly stage' should be 'The first stage', and 'it should be maintained in glass factory' could be clearer. Try to improve grammatical accuracy for a higher score.
vocabulary
You could use more varied vocabulary to make your writing more engaging. Avoid repetitive phrases like 'should be'. Instead of 'it should be burnt in furnace with the high temperature', try 'it is melted in a furnace at high temperatures'.
coherence
Provide clearer transitions between steps to improve coherence. Using words like 'next', 'then', and 'finally' helps, but also make sure each step is connected logically.
content clarity
Make sure all relevant details are included clearly. For example, mentioning the step where glass bottles are cleaned after collection could make your explanation more complete.
structure
The structure of the essay follows a logical sequence, making it easier for the reader to understand the recycling process.
transitions
Good use of transitional words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' helps in maintaining the flow of the essay.
content detail
The description of the different stages of glass bottle recycling is thorough and detailed.

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