The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in

different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of regular
exercising
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exercise
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in females and males lives in
Austalia
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Australia
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in 2010.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
women
in 5
age
groups
of 6 did exercises more regularly than
men
,
while
men
were the most active in the
age
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ages
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from
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15 to 24. In the
age
group
from 15 to 24
had
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more than
a
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half of
men
had regular activity, in the next two
age
groups
the percentage fell down
on
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to
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10 per
cent
in
25
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the 25
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to 34
group
and to approximately 40 per
cent
in
35
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the 35
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to 44
group
.
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Talking about elder
men
the number
rised
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raised
rose
rises
to 43 per
cent
and 45 per
cent
in
45
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the 45
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to 54 and 55 to 64
groups
respectively, and the highest point in elder
groups
is almost 47 per
cent
in
65
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the 65
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and over
group
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the group
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. At the same
time
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time,
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women
had
different
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a different
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picture. Young
women
did less sport than
men
on
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5 per
cent
, but in the
group
25 to 34
women
had more regular exercises than
men
on
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almost 7 per
sent
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cent
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. 53 per
cent
of
women
starting from 35 to 64 did exercise regularly and only in
elder
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the elder
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group
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group,
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the percentage was 47.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, age, groups, men, group, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Australian men
  • Australian women
  • Age groups
  • Regular physical activity
  • Participated
  • Increased
  • Decreased
  • Proportion
  • Physically active
  • Gender difference
  • Engaged
  • Exercise
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