Some organization believe that their employee should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appliance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Whether having an informal code for clothing in a working atmosphere is more valuable than
work
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quality or not is a subject of public debate.
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the outcome of employees in
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their
field of
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expertise
is of utmost importance, I will argue that it is vital for everyone
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professionally. Defining a dress code, on the one hand, seems to have
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influenced
co-workers
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co-workers'
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relationships in the office profoundly. To clarify, it
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them comfort to start a day at
work
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on account of the fact that they have
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sense of equality based
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their
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appearance
.
For instance
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,
this
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might boost their
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self-esteem
.
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, having the basic knowledge about what you
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should
could
wear at
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, they found it more convenient to get ready for upcoming events at
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such
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as
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meetings
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,
confrance
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conference
conferences
, and to name but a few.
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, it is
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beneficial
for workers
as well as
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authorities in
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to have
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a clothing code.
On the other hand
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, there is a widely held view among employees that they have
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to decide what to put on and it should be optional.
This
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statement might lead to some misunderstanding about the principles of professional dressing,
likewise
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haovic
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chaotic
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choice of
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and optical
plutions
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solutions
.
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,
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this
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factor does not affect people's quality
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work
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, it might be distracting for the
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presence
in that
circumectance
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circumstance
. In
this
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case,
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colleagues
might value
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their
appliance above
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other career goals.
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,
this
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triggers the
descipline
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discipline
in the workplace and workers' concentration. In
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conclusion
, if
organization
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plans for their member's
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outfits
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, not only does it help them to be more comfortable and mentally safe but
also
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managers tackle the problems of lack of discipline and
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focus
in
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their
job environment.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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