the table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
Looking at the table, a comparison between the proportion of staff and
factories
in England and Wales can be observed from 1851 to 1901. What is noticable
, is that the indicators of employees decreased dramatically throughout 50 years,Correct your spelling
noticeable
notable
while
the number
of factories
grew.
To begin
with, the table illustrates that the number
of men involved in a
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the
labor
force was higher than women. Change the spelling
labour
For
example
in 1851 there were 287,100 male workers,Add a comma
example,
whereas
female
indicator was 190,000. Correct article usage
the female
In addition
, to
1891 the difference was not Change preposition
in
such
significant,as digits shows
65,000 and 30,000 for men and women respectively. Change the verb form
show
In contrast
, in 1901 quite the
similar pattern was illustrated ,so there was almost no difference between the numbers Correct article usage
a
due to
their gender.
Looking more closely, a tendency to increase in number
of Change the article
a number
the number
factories
can be seen ,as in 1851 there were only 225 ,however
in 1871 the digit rose around trhee
times. Correct your spelling
three
On the other hand
,regardless the
fact that in 1881 there were 721 Change preposition
of the
manufactures
, until 1901 their indicator declined to 600.
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manufacturers
Overall
, if this
trend continues, a
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the
number
of employees will drop drastically, while
there will be more factories
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