the table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.

the table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.
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Looking at the table, a comparison between the proportion of staff and
factories
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in England and Wales can be observed from 1851 to 1901. What is
noticable
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noticeable
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, is that the indicators of employees decreased dramatically throughout 50 years,
while
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the
number
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of
factories
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grew.
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with, the table illustrates that the
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of men involved in
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labor
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force was higher than women.
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in 1851 there were 287,100 male workers,
whereas
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female
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the female
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indicator was 190,000.
In addition
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,
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1891 the difference was not
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significant,as digits
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65,000 and 30,000 for men and women respectively.
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, in 1901 quite
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similar pattern was illustrated ,so there was almost no difference between the numbers
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their gender. Looking more closely, a tendency to increase in
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number
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a number
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of
factories
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can be seen ,as in 1851 there were only 225 ,
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in 1871 the digit rose around
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three
times.
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,regardless
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fact that in 1881 there were 721
manufactures
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manufacturers
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, until 1901 their indicator declined to 600.
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, if
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trend continues,
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number
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of employees will drop drastically,
while
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there will be more
factories
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.
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