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The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.
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The pie charts compare the difference
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 exports in Great Britain in the year 2010 and 2015.
Overall
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,
machineries
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machinery
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 and vehicles remained the top products of the country,
while
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 plastics and
organics chemical
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organic chemicals
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was
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were
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 at the bottom.
To begin
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 with,
machineries
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machinery
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, vehicles, and pharmaceutical items
was
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 the most exported products of the country in 2010 with 29%, 28%, and 27%, respectively.
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 machineries (30%) and vehicles (29%) production increased in the
five year
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 period, exportation of the pharmaceutical items dramatically decreased from 27% to 18% in 2015.
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, though plastics and organic chemicals
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 the least exported items of the nation in 2010,
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 percentage rose after five years. In 2010, Great Britain has produced 9% of
plactics
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plastics
, and it grew to 13% in 2015. With regards to organic chemicals, 3% was added to the nation's revenue in 2015.

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