Last week, you visited a local supermarket and you got saticfactory service. Write a letter to the supermarket manager to thank. In your letter: - introduce yourself; - say why you are satisfied; - say thank you and write about your future visits.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to seek your expertise and assistance with a technical issue I am facing with my
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purchased
computer
. I recently purchased
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HP
computer
, model ryzen5 . It has technique  and runs on 
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, I am having trouble connecting it to the Internet. I have tried both Wi-Fi and Ethernet connections, but neither seems to work reliably. I have restarted the
computer
and checked
network
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settings, but the issue persists. Your expertise would be greatly appreciated in resolving
this
connectivity issue and ensuring my
computer
can connect to the Internet seamlessly. I am available hometown and can be reached
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email. I would appreciate it if we could schedule a time for you to assess the situation and provide recommendations for solving
this
problem. Thank you in advance for your assistance. I look forward to your prompt response.
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sincerely Sultonova Rayhona
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Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance logical structure by clearly organizing the letter into paragraphs that have distinct purposes: introduction, description of the issue, and a call to action.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a more suitable greeting and closing for the context. As this is a formal letter to a supermarket manager, consider using "Dear Manager" or a specific name if known, and close with "Yours faithfully" followed by your full name.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The first paragraph should introduce yourself and the purpose of writing. The second paragraph should describe the problem in detail. The third paragraph should express gratitude and mention future visits.
Task Achievement
Address the task more completely by introducing yourself properly, explaining the satisfactory service you received, and explicitly thanking the manager. Your letter mostly revolves around a technical issue with a computer, which doesn't fulfill the task requirements.
Task Achievement
Use a more suitable tone for thanking someone, which includes expressing gratitude and satisfaction more explicitly throughout the letter. Your current letter focuses on a technical issue, which doesn't match the task of thanking the manager for satisfactory service.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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