The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in Uk from 2001 to 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in Uk from 2001 to 2008
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of
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which
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chilldren
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children
, men and women in
UK
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the UK
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who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day from 2001 to 2008. Generally speaking, there is
a
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an
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upward trend
of
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people buying fruit and vegetables in these years.
To begin
with, it is obvious that the proportion of
female
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females
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buying fruit and
vegrtables
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vegetables
is higher
that
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teenagers and
male
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males
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. In 2007, the consumption of vegetables and fruits
of
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by
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women
is
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was
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35% in 2006 which is the peak in
thess
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the
these
years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant fluctuation
  • Dietary habits
  • Public health campaign
  • Demographic breakdown
  • Socio-economic status
  • Predictive suggestions
  • Consumption rates
  • Dietary guidelines
  • Technological advancements
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