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Some companies and organizations require their employee to wear uniform. What are the advantage and disadvantage of wearing uniform?

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Your text does not follow the structure of an essay and does not address the question about the advantages and disadvantages of wearing uniforms. An effective essay should include an introduction to present the topic, a body paragraph for the advantages, another for the disadvantages, and a conclusion to summarize your points.
coherence
For coherence, ensure your essay flows logically from one point to the next. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea with clear topic sentences. To improve cohesion, use linking words to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
task achievement
For better task achievement, directly answer the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform. Make sure to support your points with specific examples or arguments.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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