The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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It is argued that
while
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evaluating a
person
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, we often take into account his social
status
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along with
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his material possessions. In the meantime, society forgets about genuine values like honour, kindness, and trust. I personally do believe those three are the most valuable qualities and will explain my point of view in
this
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essay. It is great to have financial independence, material goods, and high
status
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.
Thus
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, a lot of opportunities open up, like
further
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directions of investment, environmental enhancements, increase in public quality of life, etc. All
this
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provides a great starting point for assessing the
person
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, but
this
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is not enough. I think we have to be honest
while
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making estimates and judgments because we need to consider what the
person
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has already done with
such
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power and what it does.
For example
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, I used to work for one of the largest IT companies in the world, and the CEO was quite shy, but he spent a huge amount of his personal assets to make the area outside the office look like Disney Land, and it was done to say "thank you" to the company workers.
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, it would not be possible without these old-fashioned things like honour, truth, kindness, and many others. A
person
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who is all about
status
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is not able to bring a wealthy life into society.
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, the honest and honoured one will act as a magnet for others and,
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, will share his best qualities and values, making other people better by default. In conclusion, I can say that
status
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is definitely important,
as well as
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kindness and honour. So, I could rephrase
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as "Without being kind and honest, it does not matter how rich or statusful a
person
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is".
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, status with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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