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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph and pie chart provides the trend of
overall
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crime
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 in the
last
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 year in UK.
Moreover
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, the Pie chart present kind of
crime
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 which is categorized by 4 kind,
such
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 as violent
crime
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, property
crime
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, drug
crime
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, and public order
crime
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. British
crime
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 trend is shown on the line graph by number of
crime
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 and
age
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.
Overall
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,
according to
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 considering the criminal
age
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, was the highest in amoung the younger people,
whereas
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 violent
crime
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 of total recorded crim was notable great at 46%. In contras,
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 the pie chart, most common
crime
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 in UK estimated violent
crime
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 (46%) , followed by propery rubbery (23%)and drug related case (22%) , despite the lowest amount of cases were public ordder related (9%).
On the other hand
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, number of
crime
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 (tens of ) recorded notable on
age
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 between 16-24
such
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 as 800
thousands
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 cases recorded among 20 years old people, 700
thousands
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 case related to the 16 years and 600
thousands
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 case related to the 16 years. The least amount of
crime
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 rate was during the
age
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 between 44-60, involving less than 100
thousands
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 of recorded
crime
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 in
last
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 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, last, overall, such".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age, thousands with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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