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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The three pie charts below demonstrate the proportion of
the
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vehicles
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 used in the UK in different
years
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 ( 1996, 1985 and 2005).
Overall
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, the proportion of private
cars
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 had the highest indicators in all cases,
on the contrary
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, the usage of other
vehicles
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were
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 lower.
To begin
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 with, the driving
private
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of private
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cars
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 increased with time. The minimum mark, to be exact 40%, can be seen in 1965. For the
last
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 40
years
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, the indicators increased by 20%. The rate of recreational
vehicles
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 was
on
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 its biggest position in 1965 and fell to 8% in 2005. The usage of public transport fluctuated between 20% to 25%
through
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over
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 the
years
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. Afterwards, travelling by lorries and other
cars
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 remained the same for 20
years
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 and had a gaude of 20%. But it decreased to 10% in 2005. In fact, people's usage in favour of private
cars
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 has changed,
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popularity
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the popularity
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 and accessibility mentioned ones,
instead
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 of other types of
vehicles
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, years, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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