The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.

The line graph gives the percentage of tourist`s visits for England art galleries,pavilions,piers and festivals in Brighton.
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The line graph explains the percentage of local travellers who visited art galleries, pavillions, piers and festivals in Brighton, England.
Overall
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art
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the art
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gallery
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galleries
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and
festival
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festivals
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were seen following a declining trend in terms of sightseers,
while
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pier
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the pier
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and pavilion saw an increase in
total
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a total
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number of visitors. With regard to the pavilion, starting from early 21% in 1980, and
then
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increased and reached
at
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just below 50% in 1995, before declining to 31 % in 2010. In terms of art
gallery
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galleries
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, it followed
a
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an
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inclining trend, with an
intial
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initial
figure of just above 20 % in 1980 and reached
at
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apply
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just under 40% in the
year
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1985. Later, it
further
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went through a continuous fall from 1990 to 2010 as the starting figure was just 20% and the eventual figure was 8%.
However
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,
pier
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the pier
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experienced various fluctuations, travellers were 10% in the beginning,
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and finally
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finally
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finally,
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it hit just above 20% in the
year
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2010. Sightseers who came to visit
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the festival
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festival
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the festival
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in the
year
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1980 were 30% followed by a gradual decrease in the given time period and ultimately reached just below 30% in the
year
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2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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