The charts show information about percentage of men and women aged 60-90 who were employed in four countries in 1970-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The bar graphs depict information regarding the proportion of
employment
, categorized by sexes
and Fix the agreement mistake
sex
aged
between 60 and 90 years old in Belgium, the US, Japan and Indonesia between 1997 and 2000. The figures are measured in Wrong verb form
ages
percentages
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that more males than females are
in Wrong verb form
were
employment
status in 1997 and 2000. Moreover
, it is also
imperative to note that employment
percentages
between two
sexes in Belgium in 2000 Correct article usage
the two
has
a great discrepancy.
In 1997, not as many males as females had worked, with Wrong verb form
had
discrepancy
of the proportion between them Correct article usage
the discrepancy
were
a bit just under ten per cent in the US as opposed to the other countries, which had great differences Unnecessary verb
apply
approximately
twenty per cent. In comparison with Change preposition
of approximately
this
, in 2000, the proportion of employment
status between males and females in Belgium was very different at about 51% and 8% respectively. While
the number of percentages
in both the USA and Indonesia had also
a big difference from 20% to 30%, there was a small different
Replace the word
difference
of
Change preposition
in
percentages
in Japan between two
genders at just under five per cent.Correct article usage
the two
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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