The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts
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information about the proportion of
time
spent by working people on various activities in one country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, the major part of these charts belongs to working persons with the tendency of growth over
the
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time
.
Also
, a
noticible
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noticeable
decline
for
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sleeping activity
shown
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.
In contrast
, people started to spend more
time
on getting relaxed at home. In 1985, the figure
of
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working
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adults category
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for 33% and, by 2008, the
numbers
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increased
up
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to 42%. Other part of the chart like "sleeping" demonstrates a slight decrease from 32% in 1985 to 25% in 2008. Notably, In 2008, a number of people had more spare
time
for
relaxesion
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relaxation
at home which is illustrated by
fall
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with
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8%
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to 12% in 1958. Other categories represent the smaller part of the data where
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number of adults started to travel more in 2008 with 8% to 2% in 1958.
However
, going out activity decreased significantly in 2008 compared to 1958 with 6% and 19% respectively.
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