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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The 6 bar charts illustrate the amount of
water
 which is used for several aims in parts of the world like North and South
America
,
Europe
,
Africa
, Central and South East Asia. It can be clearly seen that the most popular way of
water
usage
 is agricultural, only
Europe
 and North
America
 have other proportions, the smallest amount is used for
the
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domestic purposes,
while
 industrial
usage
 varies in every part. In
Asian
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the Asian
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 part, South
America
 and
Africa
 the
usage
 of
water
 for food production
is
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are
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 over 3
quaters
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quarters
,
while
 in North
America
 and
Europe
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Europe,
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 the proportion is only over 30
percents
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percent
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. At the same
time
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time,
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 the industrial purpose is not popular in
Africa
 and
Cenral
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Central
 Asia, it
represented
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is represented
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 by less than
one tenth
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one-tenth
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, in South
America
 and South East Asia the number for it is 10
percent
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per cent
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 and just over 10
respectivelly
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respectively
, but in
Europe
 and North
America
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America,
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 around a half of
water
 supply is used on factories. The domestic use of
water
 in
Africa
 and Asian parts is slightly over 10
percent
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per cent
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,
however
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however,
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 in North
America
 and
Europe
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Europe,
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 the proportion is bigger
on
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at
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 3 and 5
percent
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per cent
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respectivelly
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respectively
. In
the
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apply
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South
America
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America,
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 the
usage
 of
water
 at home is almost
the
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one fifth
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one-fifth
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, which is the biggest proportion than in other areas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, africa, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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