The bar chart below shows the percentage od Australian men an women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of Australian
men
and Use synonyms
women
of different Use synonyms
ages
who engaged in regular exercise.
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Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
females' figures increased with age, Linking Words
while
the reverse was true for males until middle age and Linking Words
men
saw a lower peak than the corresponding figure for females.
Regarding younger Use synonyms
ages
, Use synonyms
men
outnumbered Use synonyms
women
in regular exercise activity with 52% and 47.7%, respectively.Use synonyms
However
, males experienced a decline in the middle Linking Words
ages
, with just under 40, reaching their lowest rate.Use synonyms
Although
the figure increased from Linking Words
ages
45 to 65 with a small proportion.Use synonyms
Moreover
, almost all rates were below 50%.
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In contrast
, young Linking Words
women
did regular physical activity less than their older counterparts.Use synonyms
However
, the situation changed, when females between 25-54 Linking Words
ages
in regular exercise reached their peak at 55%. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, at Linking Words
ages
55-64 Use synonyms
women
's promotion Use synonyms
were
again greater than Change the verb form
was
men
's by around 8%. Interestingly, the proportion of Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
women
were almost same who were 65 and older with 46% and 47%, respectively.Use synonyms
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