The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows Australian
men
and women
of different ages
who engaged in regular exercise. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is clear that
women
's figures increased with age
, while
the reverse was true for men
until middle ages
and they saw a lower peak than the corresponding figure of females.
Regarding the youth age
group, males outnumbered women
in regular physical activity with
52% and 47.7%, respectively.Change preposition
by
However
, men
experienced a slight fall in Middle
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the Middle
Ages
, with just under 40% and reaching their lowest rate. Although
, the figure increased from Correct word choice
However
age
group between 45-65 and older with a small proportion.Add an article
the age
Moreover
, almost all figures were below 50%.
In contrast
, young female did regular exercise less than their older counterparts.However
, the situation changed,when women
between 25 and 54 age
group were more active reaching their peak at 55.3%. Likewise
, elder females were again greater than males by around 8% at ages
55-64. Interestingly, the proportion of men
and women
were
doing exercise was almost the same at Correct pronoun usage
who were
ages
65 and older with 46.6% and 47%, respectively.Submitted by ikromovavazbek01 on
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