The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows Australian
men
and Use synonyms
women
of different Use synonyms
ages
who engaged in regular exercise. Units are measured in percentages.
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Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
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women
's figures increased with Use synonyms
age
, Use synonyms
while
the reverse was true for Linking Words
men
until middle Use synonyms
ages
and they saw a lower peak than the corresponding figure of females.
Regarding the youth Use synonyms
age
group, males outnumbered Use synonyms
women
in regular physical activity Use synonyms
with
52% and 47.7%, respectively.Change preposition
by
However
, Linking Words
men
experienced a slight fall in Use synonyms
Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
Ages
, with just under 40% and reaching their lowest rate. Use synonyms
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Although
, the figure increased from Correct word choice
However
Use synonyms
age
group between 45-65 and older with a small proportion.Add an article
the age
Moreover
, almost all figures were below 50%.
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In contrast
, young female did regular exercise less than their older counterparts.Linking Words
However
, the situation changed,when Linking Words
women
between 25 and 54 Use synonyms
age
group were more active reaching their peak at 55.3%. Use synonyms
Likewise
, elder females were again greater than males by around 8% at Linking Words
ages
55-64. Interestingly, the proportion of Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
women
Use synonyms
were
doing exercise was almost the same at Correct pronoun usage
who were
ages
65 and older with 46.6% and 47%, respectively.Use synonyms
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