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you and some friends ate meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you wre very pleased with the food and sevise.

#friends #restaurant #occasion #wre #food #sevise
Dear Sir or Madam, I trust
this
 finds you well. The
last
 party in your restaurant was awesome.
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, we were so excited about the decorating skills of one of your waiters. From the moment we stepped in, the warm and welcoming service made us astonished.
And
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while
 sitting in the woodland-colored chair, I felt something crazy like freezing. If you wanted to know why we celebrated
this
 occasion, okay, get it. My bestie had made his business, but his
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 fell down. After a few years, he started a new one and became rich. Now he bought a villa in Dubai, that's why we're celebrating it. If I hadn't come to your restaurant, I wouldn't have experienced real service. Even the DJ knows when to pause the music or resume. And the waiters are the fastest in the world. Our order comes in 5 minutes, and thanks to the chefs who made a great meal. Best regards, JoXa
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coherence cohesion
Consider using a more structured approach in your letter. Start with an introduction that clearly states the reason for writing. Follow this with a body where each paragraph discusses a specific aspect of your experience, such as the service, food, and personal anecdotes. Conclude with a summary or a note of thanks.
task achievement
To score higher in task response, ensure that every part of the task is addressed directly and comprehensively. In your case, more focus on the food and service in detail and how exactly they added to your celebration would be beneficial. Specific examples will add depth to your letter.
coherence cohesion
Use varied and complex sentence structures throughout your letter to enhance coherence. Avoid abrupt transitions by linking ideas and paragraphs smoothly, using phrases that indicate addition, contrast, cause, and effect.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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