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The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
#sales #kinds #games
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bar chart demonstrates the world
sales
 of various
types
 of digital
games
 from 2000 to 2006 . There are four
types
 of
games
 in total . Various
types
 of
games
 are mobile phone ,online , console and handheld
games
 . The
game
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games
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which
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whose
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sale
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sales
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is
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 steadily increasing and popular
is
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 handheld
games
 and there is a constant decrease in the
sales
 of console
games
 . Handheld
games
 are very popular in
whole
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 world. So there
in
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is
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an
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a
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 constant rise
of
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in
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the sale
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sale
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sales
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in
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of
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 these
types
 of
games
 from nearly 12
billion
dollar
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dollars
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 to very
near
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nearly
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 18
billion
dollars
. The console
games
sale
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sales
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 are dropping every year from about 6
billion
dollars
 to less than 3
billion
dollars
. Both
event
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 took place between 2000 to 2006. In the year 2000, there is no
sales
 of mobile
phone
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phones
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 and online
games
 .
The online
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Online
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games
sale
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sales
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 started
from
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in
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 2001 with a high growth in
sales
 to 2006 which is more than 9
billion
dollars
,
whereas
 mobile phone
games
sale
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sales
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 started from 2002
to
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with
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 a growth
inincome
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in income
 of appropriately around 7
billion
dollars
 in 2006.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, types, games, sale, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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