The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
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bar chart demonstrates the world
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of various
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of digital
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from 2000 to 2006 . There are four
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of
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in total . Various
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of
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are mobile phone ,online , console and handheld
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. The
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games
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which
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steadily increasing and popular
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handheld
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and there is a constant decrease in the
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of console
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. Handheld
games
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are very popular in
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world. So there
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constant rise
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sale
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in
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these
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of
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from nearly 12
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dollar
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to very
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18
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dollars
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. The console
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sale
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are dropping every year from about 6
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dollars
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to less than 3
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dollars
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. Both
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took place between 2000 to 2006. In the year 2000, there is no
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of mobile
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phones
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and online
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.
The online
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games
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sale
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started
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2001 with a high growth in
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to 2006 which is more than 9
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dollars
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,
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mobile phone
games
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sale
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started from 2002
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a growth
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in income
of appropriately around 7
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dollars
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in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, types, games, sale, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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