it is observed that most governments pay a lot of money for the art projects. For instance, there are more and more paintings and sculptures seen in public places. Some people say that it is wrong and governments should spend more money on other important things of public interest. Do you agree or disagree?

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governments
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mostly
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on art,
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can be observed in public areas where more artistic
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pictures
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and posters are displayed.
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, some part of the population does not
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it as a viable step and
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a development
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other things that are socially more important, I
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point that there is more need to spend money on health care services and to build educational infrastructure. The primary reason why
government
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should stop spending on art collections is because
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system of the country is getting worse. It is a core area which really
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an eye on it, from
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prespective
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perspectives
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.
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such
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enough supply of medicines, patients have been waiting for years
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appointment
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of
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their surgery.
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should
spent
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money to provide free education in
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care sector so that more and more
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aspire to take education in the
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field
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.If we have enough doctors there will be
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chances of someone
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waiting for service,
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develop
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system for providing health care
supplys
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supplies
to all
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pharmacies
pharmacy
.
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main reason, that can restrain
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the spendings
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spendings
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of
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the government
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from
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artistics
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artistic
goods is
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infrastructure which
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up to the mark,
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, following trend of
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population. Every day on radio talk,
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their anxiety and
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government
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the government
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to do something in
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area. Students are forced to
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in
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private schools
due to
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of seats in schools,
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,
the
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government
is collecting taxes from
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to provide basic facilities. As per,the numbers of
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living
in particular
area
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, there is
need
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to develop more schools,
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if
this
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sooner it impact the whole society.
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,
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Pakistan
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not aware
how
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of how
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to overcome poverty
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there
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their
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country. In conclusion, I believe taking
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against
stop
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spending on arts goods should be
encourged
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encouraged
and spending should
to
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increase to develop healthcare services and school facilities.
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