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Band 4.5

The diagram below shows how coffee is produced and prepared for sale in supermarkets and shops.

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The picture illustrates the
process
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 of
coffee
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 manufacture and preparation for sale on the market.
It is clear that
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 there are eleven stages in the production of
coffee
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. The
process
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 begins with the picking of
coffee
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beans
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 and ends at the packing stage. Looking at the
coffee
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 production
process
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 in detail,
coffee
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beans
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 must first be picked in the fields. These
beans
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 are
then
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 dried, roasted, and cooled before being put in a grinding machine, which turns the
beans
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 into
coffee
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 granules. At the sixth stage in the
process
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, the ground
coffee
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 is mixed with hot water, and the resulting mixture is strained.
Next,
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the mixture is frozen and
then
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 passed once again through the grinder. After that, the ground, frozen liquid is dried in a vacuum so that the water evaporates, leaving the
coffee
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 granules.
Finally
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, these granules are packed into
coffee
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 jars for delivery to shops.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, coffee, beans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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