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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given column chart illustrates the proportion of the global population in different countries during a hundred-year period since 1950. We can see that, japan accounted for the least amount of the volume of people in all years. Moving onto details, it is seen that China,
USA
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the USA
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 and Japan experienced a downward trend in terms of population
in
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 1950 and 2000. China fell from just above 25% to well above 15% in 2050. The amount of population in Japan was almost halved in comparison with usa in the corresponding years.
On the other hand
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, India showed a moderate upward trend from 15% in 1950 to just above 20% in 2050.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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