The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below
illustartes
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illustrates
the report of driving
test
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tests
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between different genders in one Asian country who could
got
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get
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driving
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a driving
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license in different four years.
Overall
,
it is clear that
, in 2000 women had the highest per cent.
According to
the chart, in 1980 nearly 50 % of women passed the
test
while
in that year about 30% of men got the license.
In addition
, in 2000 approximately 70% of
female
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females
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passed the
test
whereas
in that year almost 50% of
male
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males
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passed the
test
.
Also
, in 2000 and 2010 men had the same per cent about 50%.
Moreover
, it is obvious that,in 1990 men
about
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were about
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15% more than
from
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in
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1980. In conclusion, as you can see, the highest rate is
blonged
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belonged
to the women in 2000.
In addition
, the lowest per cent is
blonged
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belonged
to the male in 1980.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words test with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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