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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are important. -Suggest a solution.

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is to request you find the
plane
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ticket
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 that I left at Hilton, Tashkent on February 12, 2024. Primarily, I am Ann Klark and ordered food from the cafe in a
hotel
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 on February 12.But the meal
didn't
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wasn't
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prepare
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prepared
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 with enough quality products.
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, I was very hungry at that time so of that I was very angry. That's
way
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why
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 I decided to leave
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hotel
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the hotel
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 completely. When the
hotel
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 guard told me that the taxi arrived, I was in a hurry and I forgot to take my
plane
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ticket
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 from the table. Please ask your
hotel
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's janitors about forgotten items to find my
plane
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ticket
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, because the flight is after only two days. If you find my
plane
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ticket
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then
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 inform
to
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me. I am very grateful to you if you will find my
plane
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ticket
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. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours faithfully, Ann Klark

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Task Response
To improve your task response, make sure to address all parts of the prompt. Your letter should explain the problem, why the documents are important, and suggest a solution. While you did explain the problem and suggested a solution, you should make it clearer why the documents (or in this case, the plane ticket) are important to you, elaborating on the consequences of not finding them.
Coherence and Cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, ensure that your paragraphs are well-organized, and ideas flow logically from one to the next. Your letter would benefit from a clearer structure, separating the story of how you left your ticket, the importance of the ticket, and the solution into distinct paragraphs. This will make your letter easier to follow.
Greeting and Closing
Your greeting and closing could be more formally consistent. Starting with 'Dear Sir or Madam,' is appropriate, but the closing could better reflect this level of formality. Use 'Yours sincerely' when you know the name of the person you're writing to and 'Yours faithfully' when you don't, followed by your full name.
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