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modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced amount of time people spend seeing their friends this has had a negative effect on their social lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, using email,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
 and other social media
have
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has
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 decreased the amount of
time
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indiviuals
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individuals
 spend visiting their
friends
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 and family members. In my opinion,
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 essay will agree with the statement that it has caused negative social effects because it has increased
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issolation
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isolation
 and reduced bonding among
friends
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.
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 with, advanced types of communication
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 led to some drawbacks
on
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 social lives. one of the reasons is that it has increased
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issolation
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isolation
 among
people
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 and
that is
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 to say
,
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 when individuals communicate through emails, it does not feel the same as talking face to face and
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 makes them feel
like
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as if they have not talked to each other since it is always
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 briefs and not physical.
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, emailing always makes
people
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 lack
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apply
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the
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concentration since members are unable to see
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one
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on
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one
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 another
hence
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 letting
friends
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 miss themselves more and increasing
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issolation
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isolation
.
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professor
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 James did
a
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research and found out that 50% of the members who use emails as a main form of communication tend to be
issolated
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isolated
 which
is
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 a negative effect on our lives.
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, another point why messaging has
affcted
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affected
 our social lives is
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 the fact it has reduced bonding between close
friends
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.
In other words
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of the population that use it as a way of communicating tend to get bored sometimes
while
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 chatting and
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 forces them to stop chatting to themselves
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as
time
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 goes on, the bonding among
friends
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 declines since the number of times they talk is less.
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,
reseach
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research
 done by Joyce at Bugema says that some
people
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 lose their
friendship
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friendships
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 since they do not have enough
time
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 to spend with
themsleves
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themselves
 and the bond
reduceses
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reduces
as a result
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 of them not meeting often. In conclusion, I believe that advanced communication
such
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 as massaging using phones
have
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 made
people
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to
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spend less
time
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 with their
friends
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 and
this
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 has led to demerits because of
rise
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the rise
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 in
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issolation
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isolation
 and
reduction
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the reduction
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 of bonding.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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