The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the volume of the
population
,
birth
rate
, and mortality
rate
in England and Wales during a 300-year period since 1700.
It is clear that
although
population
size and
birth
rate
experienced an increase, death rates showed a fall in the corresponding period. It is evident that
population
size had a significant rise between 1700 and 2000. The
number of
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population
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the population
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experienced
a
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moderate growth since 1700,
then
it
leveled
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off at 10
million
for 50 years.
then
It had had a sharp climb for 100 years by 1900 and it continued to grow modestly for a century and reached just under 50
million
in terms of
population
. Mortality
rate
and
Birth
rate
followed almost
a
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same pattern with some differences. Both of them had
a
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upward trend at
first,
following
a
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stability,
perior
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prior
to
sharp
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a sharp
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decrease.
Then
both both of them remained almost stable and fell markedly.
Although
between 1950 and 2000
birth
rate
increased
at
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approximately 33
million
,
death
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the death
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rate
leveled off at 20
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, rate, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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  • stabilize
  • steep
  • advancements
  • notable
  • shift
  • norms
  • impact
  • critical factor
  • relatively stable
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