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The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth rate and the death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the volume of the
population
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,
birth
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rate
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, and mortality
rate
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 in England and Wales during a 300-year period since 1700.
It is clear that
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although
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population
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 size and
birth
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rate
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 experienced an increase, death rates showed a fall in the corresponding period. It is evident that
population
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 size had a significant rise between 1700 and 2000. The
number of
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population
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the population
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 experienced
a
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moderate growth since 1700,
then
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 it
leveled
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levelled
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 off at 10
million
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 for 50 years.
then
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 It had had a sharp climb for 100 years by 1900 and it continued to grow modestly for a century and reached just under 50
million
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 in terms of
population
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. Mortality
rate
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 and
Birth
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rate
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 followed almost
a
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the
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 same pattern with some differences. Both of them had
a
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an
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 upward trend at
first,
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following
a
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stability,
perior
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prior
 to
sharp
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a sharp
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 decrease.
Then
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 both both of them remained almost stable and fell markedly.
Although
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 between 1950 and 2000
birth
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rate
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 increased
at
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 approximately 33
million
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,
death
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the death
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rate
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 leveled off at 20
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, rate, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • stabilize
  • steep
  • advancements
  • notable
  • shift
  • norms
  • impact
  • critical factor
  • relatively stable
  • Industrial Revolution
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