Two weeks ago you bought a radio from a local branch of a well-known chain of shops. It did not work properly. The shop took it back and said they would repair it. You have waited a week and it is still not ready. Write a letter to the shop. In your letter say what has happened and how you feel ask them to explain why there has been a delay ask them to repair the radio very quickly or to supply you with a new radio You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear
sir
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or Madam, I am writing
this
letter regarding my
radio
repairing
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repair
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delay. My name is
himali
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Himali
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.
two
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Two
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weeks ago
i
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I
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bought
radio
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a radio
the radio
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from your shop.I am
the
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a
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permanent customer
in
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of
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your shop.
However
,I
try
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tried
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to on the
radio
in my house unfortunately didn't work properly.
Thus
,
this
problem started i called
to
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the
sale
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sales
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department in your shop.happy to say,they
give
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back to me
response
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a response
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as soon as possible.
As a
result
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result,
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they took back my
radio
for
the
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apply
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repair.
at
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that time
i
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I
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feel
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felt
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so happy about your service. So previously
i
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I
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mentions
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mentioned
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i
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I
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so
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am so
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happy about your service.
Nevertheless
,now
i
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am so worried about your service.
Reasons
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is that still didn't give back to my
radio
.I want to know what is the reason for the delay.I would like to say,if you can give
good
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a good
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reason
my
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feel very comfortable.
As well
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as i like to say if you can repair give
back
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it back
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to me very quickly.
Due to
in my house don't have any electronic
dives
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devices
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for listen news,music.etc.if you are unable to repair please supply new
radio
.Please
kind enough
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kindly
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consider my request. Thanks. Yours faithfully, Himali, Thanks,
Submitted by himalhi.deepthi on

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Coherence & Cohesion
Focus on clear paragraph structuring. Each paragraph should serve a distinct purpose: introducing the issue, detailing the problem, making a request, and concluding.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include greeting and closing elements more formally. The letter begins with 'Dear Sir or Madam,' which is appropriate, but the conclusion should mirror this level of formality ('Yours sincerely' or 'Yours faithfully' are better options than just 'Thanks').
Task Achievement
Ensure the task is fully addressed by explicitly following the instructions: describe the issue and your feelings, ask for an explanation for the delay, and request a quick solution or a new product.
Task Achievement
Use a more suitable tone for formal letters. Avoid overly casual language and expressions ('my feel very comfortable'). Formal, polite requests and expressions of disappointment or concern are more appropriate.
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