The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given line graph illustrates the number of foreign
visitors
coming to
the
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Great Britain for a variety of goals during a 20-year period since 1989.
It is clear that
the number of
visitors
with different goals saw an increase. People who came to the UK to meet friends and relatives experienced a sharp climb between 1989 and 2009 and grew to 7
million
. The next year it had a significant fall and reached
to
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just above 6
millions
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million
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. Business and
holiday
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holidays
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showed almost
same
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the same
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pattern
staring
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starting
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1994 until before 2004 and
then
they reached the same number of almost 7
million
visitors
. After that business purposes took over and saw a dramatic growth and reached
to
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8
million
visitors
in 2009. But next year holiday purposes took the lead and
rechead
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reached
redhead
a
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all-time high among other aims to 9
million
visitors
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • statistics
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak periods
  • holidaymakers
  • business trips
  • educational tourism
  • significant increase/decrease
  • data interpretation
  • exponential growth
  • steady decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cultural events
  • tourist influx
  • graph analysis
  • quantitative change
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