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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel . In this letter describe the problem at the hotel explain what the mmanager had said the time say what you want the manager to do

#night #hotel #noise #system #manager #contact #compensation #haven #mmanager #time
Dear Sir or Madam The reason why I am writing
the
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this
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 letter is I want to remind your promise about the problem at the hotel . You have promised me
to
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apply
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compensation ,but , I still
having
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 waited . I recently spent time in your hotel and I felt discomfort that there was a noise of heaty system in the mornings and
this
 would disturb me to relax and well sleep .
Furthermore
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 I suffered from noise academic
works
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work
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 and concentration .
Additionally
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Additionally,
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 I must
told
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tell
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 one that
another
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other
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 people felt discomfort too and they would want
to
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compensation too. I would to know
that
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apply
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when is the time which you promised ,in light of , you told me
to
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apply
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you were going to compensation at
then
 .
However
,I didn't receive your promise .
Thus
 I must remind the time
you
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apply
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. I would
happy
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be happy
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when
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if
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 you managed
had
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to have
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 said assurance I would to your ordering another comfort room from
other
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another
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 hotel or
bringing
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bring
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amendment
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an amendment
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 into
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the heaty
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heaty
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heat
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 system. I hope you will understand me and solve
this
 problem. Best regards Farangiz Salimova.
Submitted by soglomovsarvar on

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General
Start your letter with a polite greeting and end it with a courteous closing to make it more professional and respectful.
Task Achievement
Clearly introduce your purpose in the first paragraph to set a clear context for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate different ideas and arguments. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea with supporting details.
Coherence and Cohesion
For a more cohesive letter, use linking words and phrases to connect sentences and paragraphs. This helps guide the reader through your argument or narrative.
Task Achievement
Be explicit in what you are requesting or expecting as compensation. Giving specific suggestions or stating explicit outcomes you desire can make your request clearer to the recipient.
General
Consider reviewing basic grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure to improve the readability and professionalism of your writing.
Task Achievement
Strive for a more formal tone suitable for writing to a hotel manager. Avoid informal language and ensure correct use of language conventions appropriate for formal letters.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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